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Spooky Friday

Friday. One day as I was walking to school I saw a track that I hadn't seen before. I don't know why but I just started to go down it. The track was very dark and gloomy. I had to go to school then but I am going back to that track another day with Fred. * Great Work Michael. [1]

It’s lacking in plot, and provides no explanation of this “Fred” person who’s suddenly been inflicted upon the protagonist. I don’t rate the narrative aspect of this novel highly.

On the other hand, consider the correct use of full stops, apostrophes and capitalisation, as well as impressive adherence to keeping between the lines. Visible evidence of text erasure also shows the author’s commitment to appropriate spacing between words, despite battling with his own impatience to express ideas. Added together these elements ensured a star-spangled reception from the public.

6/10.
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#1 Comment By john On 17 November, 2010 @ 9:50 am

I like it.
Shades of The Mad Dog Gang meets Rotten Fred and Ratsguts…
Steven King and Vincent Ward meet Lonely Planet or 101 Gloomy New Zealand Tracks
with photos and birds eye maps/views by …….
Grammar and Punctuation exceptional…. Nice rhythm too,
Left wanting more….

#2 Comment By Mike McGavin On 23 November, 2010 @ 9:00 am

I wonder if Reader’s Digest has a condensed edition.